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</span> </span> <span class="card-operate active"> <span class="edit"> &nbsp; </span> <span class="content"> &nbsp; </span> </span> </span></div> <p>&nbsp;</p> </div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-XMTxdU2zeoRUmlxOm6bc3mWgnPb">美國(guó)院校的文書除了常規(guī)的Academic Statement of Purpose,，還會(huì)有一些額外的Essay (PHS, DEI Essay 等）來(lái)幫助招生官更好的了解學(xué)生，我們今天就從H同學(xué) Cornell 以及 Duke的文書來(lái)看看應(yīng)該如何進(jìn)行寫作。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-AcdhdOnMVoEDQhxACxnc9o0ZnEd">&nbsp;</div> <h1 class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-SUKXdX89EouZW9xUx53cfGObn4d"><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>Academic Statement of Purpose</strong></span></h1> <p>&nbsp;</p> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-GX6ddxk8xox8RYxGGuxcUhv1nGf">H 同學(xué)是一名工作人士，所以我們?cè)趯懳臅鴷r(shí)，著重寫的就是H同學(xué)的工作經(jīng)歷；在撰寫康奈爾大學(xué)這篇個(gè)人陳述的初稿時(shí)，我們首先根據(jù)H同學(xué)提供的素材，將重點(diǎn)放在她的兩段項(xiàng)目管理經(jīng)歷上。我們將這些經(jīng)歷與具體項(xiàng)目相匹配，以證明H同學(xué)是該項(xiàng)目的理想候選人。后來(lái)H同學(xué)偶然在溝通時(shí)提起自己目前有個(gè)小型創(chuàng)業(yè)公司，因此我們抓住這一點(diǎn)對(duì)PS進(jìn)行了修改，選擇了H同學(xué)工作中的一段項(xiàng)目管理經(jīng)歷以及她自己的創(chuàng)業(yè)經(jīng)歷，這正好可以和Cornell 工程管理這個(gè)項(xiàng)目下面的小方向（創(chuàng)業(yè)和產(chǎn)品管理）相適配。突出H同學(xué)的管理能力以及自己與眾不同的點(diǎn)。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-JMpTdsFQnoMaGKxTZsEcVClLnZc">&nbsp;</div> <h1 class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-KmghdpDUIowawGxScdvcnzEJnif"><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>PHS</strong></span></h1> <p>&nbsp;</p> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-ByN6duiAboyLGXxOe1UcdDYVnZd">除了常規(guī)的學(xué)術(shù)PS之外，Cornell 還需要學(xué)生提供一篇PHS，那在開(kāi)始談及H同學(xué)的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷前，我們先來(lái)了解一下什么是PHS。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-ByN6duiAboyLGXxOe1UcdDYVnZd">&nbsp;</div> <div class="image-uploaded gallery old-record-id-I7q3dtovNoc5GexiHcCcqfTVnPh" data-type="image" data-ace-gallery-json="{&quot;items&quot;:[{&quot;uuid&quot;:&quot;010d41b8-8093-440b-9b42-20f23282e520&quot;,&quot;height&quot;:265,&quot;width&quot;:838,&quot;currHeight&quot;:265,&quot;currWidth&quot;:838,&quot;natrualHeight&quot;:265,&quot;natrualWidth&quot;:838,&quot;pluginName&quot;:&quot;imageUpload&quot;,&quot;scale&quot;:1,&quot;src&quot;:&quot;https%3A%2F%2Finternal-api-drive-stream.feishu.cn%2Fspace%2Fapi%2Fbox%2Fstream%2Fdownload%2Fpreview%2FZS1xboOHOoVl2HxQDVccaachnUb%2F%3Fpreview_type%3D16&quot;,&quot;file_token&quot;:&quot;ZS1xboOHOoVl2HxQDVccaachnUb&quot;,&quot;image_type&quot;:&quot;image/jpeg&quot;,&quot;size&quot;:50158,&quot;comments&quot;:[]}]}"><img style="display: block; margin-left: auto; margin-right: auto;" src="https://info.compassedu.hk/sucai/content/1716171272528/1716171272528.png" width="491" height="155" /></div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-R8todbGPpoFtEkxxiAUcXgA8nrd">PHS 是關(guān)于你的故事，招生官希望通過(guò)這個(gè)故事了解你的性格、成功、失敗、沖突以及自我發(fā)現(xiàn)的歷程。這些元素可以構(gòu)成一個(gè)生動(dòng)的敘述，通過(guò)這個(gè)故事，你可以展現(xiàn)出自己的性格特點(diǎn)，包括韌性、堅(jiān)持和不屈不撓的品質(zhì)等。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-UM0vdMkERo6frGxgJBKcEHZrnWc">&nbsp;</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-L2NydnK6Jo7gEZxfwSyceAVKns9">而H同學(xué)所提供的素材也正是一個(gè)很好的PHS范例，開(kāi)篇敘述了H同學(xué)的家庭背景，讓我們了解她出生在一個(gè)什么樣的家庭以及這樣的家庭對(duì)她產(chǎn)生的影響：想要?jiǎng)?chuàng)業(yè)，做生意，闖出自己的一片天地讓父親刮目相看；緊接著的一個(gè)挑戰(zhàn)也可以讓招生官了解H同學(xué)的性格：H同學(xué)本科就讀于加拿大 阿爾伯塔大學(xué)，而求學(xué)之路并沒(méi)有我們想象中那么輕松，父親的不支持，斷掉了她和母親的經(jīng)濟(jì)來(lái)源，但是H同學(xué)并沒(méi)有因此而放棄自己的夢(mèng)想；她向父親說(shuō)明大學(xué)的學(xué)費(fèi)等以后畢業(yè)之后會(huì)全數(shù)還給他，而她也做到了這一點(diǎn)；畢業(yè)參加工作，創(chuàng)建自己的公司。這一路走來(lái)，是那么的不容易，而H同學(xué)也很好的堅(jiān)持下來(lái)了，我想這也是這篇PHS可以打動(dòng)招生官的一點(diǎn)吧，從這篇PHS中，我們完全可以看到H同學(xué)的韌性，不服輸，勇于挑戰(zhàn)以及自身較強(qiáng)的能力。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-VRQidSo5zomLaWxfGsncGcZenOe">&nbsp;</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-Q35ydhsEOoxJDUxUYwxcsOL0n9Y">從這一點(diǎn)也可以看出招生官想從PHS里了解你的哪些方面，有時(shí)候很多學(xué)生會(huì)陷入一個(gè)誤區(qū)，覺(jué)得我需要在PHS也提及學(xué)術(shù)相關(guān)的內(nèi)容，要體現(xiàn)我的學(xué)術(shù)能力，其實(shí)也并非如此，從標(biāo)化成績(jī)，Academic Statement of Purpose， CV中，招生官已經(jīng)可以了解到你學(xué)術(shù)方面的能力，而在PHS中，就可以從你個(gè)人生活的角度出發(fā)，談?wù)勀闼龅降囊恍┐煺?，以及你自己是怎么克服的，這就可以體現(xiàn)你的韌性；談?wù)勀闼龅降奶魬?zhàn)，以及你是怎么去完成這個(gè)挑戰(zhàn)，這就可以體現(xiàn)你的挑戰(zhàn)精神以及你解決問(wèn)題的能力；談?wù)勀愕某晒蛘咦钭屇愀械接谐删透械囊患碌鹊?，可以從這些角度出發(fā)。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-H7JZdmiTuo6qzpxLnFncRNannKd">&nbsp;</div> <h1 class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-JQF6difbhowKqpxKiTzcY8lgnld"><span style="color: #ffffff;"><strong>Duke 15 Random Things about you</strong></span></h1> <p>&nbsp;</p> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-M7cKdjNGFo5uGQxT3MScyj0jnLb">最后我們來(lái)看看Duke 的特殊Essay, 關(guān)于你的15件小事，其實(shí)也就跟上面的PHS有異曲同工之妙，只是更簡(jiǎn)短了，招生官主要就是想通過(guò)這15件事來(lái)了解你是什么樣的人；談?wù)勛约旱呐d趣愛(ài)好，談?wù)勛约旱囊恍┯腥さ氖拢蠹也灰ε绿峒瓣P(guān)于自己一些不好的點(diǎn)，重在分享，因?yàn)檫@些都是你與眾不同的點(diǎn)。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-M7cKdjNGFo5uGQxT3MScyj0jnLb">&nbsp;</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-AfbidAICOob0W2xWZpAcm72Enbg">下面是一些例子可以作為一些參考 （學(xué)生原素材）：</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-AfbidAICOob0W2xWZpAcm72Enbg">&nbsp;</div> <p><span style="color: #262626;">1、I love folk music and have self-taught myself to play the guitar.</span></p> <p>&nbsp;</p> <p><span style="color: #262626;">2、My favorite singer is Taylor Swift.</span></p> <p>&nbsp;</p> <p><span style="color: #262626;">3、While accompanying a friend going through a breakup with her boyfriend, she cried throughout the whole night, but I drank half a bottle of vodka within half an hour and ended up vomiting until midnight.</span></p> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-NYw1d71TtomBNAxiAVacJu4an0c">&nbsp;</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-Q7N1dR1RCogGHWx26eocsfv9nmh">H同學(xué)自身實(shí)力出眾，加之我們一起精心準(zhǔn)備的申請(qǐng)文書材料。讓康奈爾大學(xué)以及杜克大學(xué)對(duì)H同學(xué)發(fā)出了面試邀請(qǐng)，而H同學(xué)也憑借自己的實(shí)力出色的完成了面試。這些綜合因素讓如康奈爾大學(xué)和杜克大學(xué)這樣的頂尖名校在完成面試后，毫不遲疑地向她拋出了心儀offer。而最終，H同學(xué)如愿以償，拿到了讓自己充滿憧憬和期待的康奈爾大學(xué)的錄取通知書，她即將開(kāi)啟人生新的精彩篇章，前往這所頂尖學(xué)府繼續(xù)深造。</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-Q7N1dR1RCogGHWx26eocsfv9nmh">&nbsp;</div> <div class="ace-line ace-line old-record-id-Q7N1dR1RCogGHWx26eocsfv9nmh">我們由衷地祝愿H同學(xué)在康奈爾大學(xué)這個(gè)廣闊的學(xué)習(xí)舞臺(tái)上，能夠盡情施展自己的所長(zhǎng)，收獲充實(shí)的知識(shí)和見(jiàn)解；也希望她秉持著好學(xué)上進(jìn)的態(tài)度，在此廣結(jié)貴人,建立起遍及學(xué)術(shù)界和業(yè)界的廣泛人脈網(wǎng)絡(luò)，為未來(lái)的事業(yè)發(fā)展打下堅(jiān)實(shí)基礎(chǔ)。</div> </div> <div class="qrcode-content-wrapper" contenteditable="false"> <div style="position: absolute; 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